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| KAKARIKI BIRDS |
We arrive at Lochmara bay and everyone was so thrilled to get off the boat and see some animals. We charged off the boat and they told us to sit down and we listened to their staff to give us instructions. We strolled to a picnic table to put our bags down. We started hiking up the path way to the birds in the cage. We got split into two groups and then the first group went up the stairs into the cage.While the other group were just watching them. A few minutes later they went out the cage and it's our turn to see the birds. So we went in the cage and the birds were crazy . They were flying like a jet about to nose dive into a freezing river. They were chirping as loud as a duck about to get eaten by a crocodile.
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ReplyDeleteHi Andrew, I like how you described the sentence about the birds flying crazy. It makes me feel that I am there standing in from of the birds. Next time you could add more vocabulary and add big words you don't normally say.
ReplyDeleteNice bit of writing, Andrew. I agree with Johnny's comment about using more interesting word that you don't usually say. Think about what might be interesting for your readers. Keep up the good work!
ReplyDeletei like the story of the kakariki birds
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